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Her head was spinning. She stumbled and fell ill. She thought, "Maybe one more drink will make me feel better." As she tried opening another bottle of beer she gagged. Vomit spewed out of her mouth on the nearest persons shoes. She stood up nd ran to the bathroom. She kept the door wide open as puke poured into the toilet and onto the floor. Fading in and out of conciousness she saw someone come into the bathroom. As the door closed she passed out.

The next morning she woke up on the toilet. Her pants were hanging on from one of  her ankles and her legs spread wide apart. The toilet was still filled with her vomit from the night before. Still out of it, she pulls her pants up and flushes the toilet. On the sink there was a piece of cake and a note. It said:

thanks for last night
it was a 'piece of cake'

She threw the note away. As she started eating the cake she began to cry.

©2008-2009 ~x0x0paperdolls0x0x
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Author's Comments

so, i did this for the The-Literati
i tried meshing three things together:

"If you fall asleep drunk on the sofa, what happens?
Plot Point: Someone who falls asleep on the toilet.
An unexpected piece of cake!"

i kind of forgot about the sofa part, but incorperated the drunkeness and what happens. i also added the toilet, but she really didn't fall asleep... she more passed out...

wow, i'm not good at this stuff...
oh well.

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:iconx0x0paperdolls0x0x:
what do you mean, "wait, what?"

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maybe it means something....
:iconramen78:
I don't understand any of the story or the meaning of the twist ending. First, she's puking everywhere, but then she gets up after passing out to a slice of cake. What does the cake mean? Who would yank a passed out girl's pants down and leave cake? I'm sorry if it seems like I butchered your work, but please explain.
:iconwings-of-shadow:
It's well written. And I couldn't help but laugh at the comment before mine. Apparently someone's a tad naiive around here XD

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I wanna know how forever feels.
:iconx0x0paperdolls0x0x:
lol! thanks!

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maybe it means something....
:iconraspil:
rape and cake?

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If you can't laugh at yourself, you don't have the right to laugh at anyone else.

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